Saturday, September 30, 2006

My Sestinability

Inspired by Driftwood's Sestina, I dabbled in some structured writing!
Google or wiki “Sestina” to get an idea of what it is…just so you know how far I’ve wandered from “sestining”.

My choice of "sentencenders" are:
1. Wish
2. Eyes
3. Game
4. Silhouette
5. Pleasure
6. Eternity

…what on earth was I thinking?? I guess we’ll never know. Miss you Freud!! Aite, read on.


Mood lights, soft whisper, tender touch, make a wish
Your breath on my face, your hair in my eyes
Lead me on, turn me on, and lure me into your game
As the moon devours you, I follow your silhouette
To the depths of darkness, the heights of pleasure
Let the moment linger, baby let’s stretch this to eternity.

Cut to five years later…geez! It does seem like eternity
I need to find a freakin’ genie just to make one darned wish
Kids are fun, kids are cute, kids are a pleasure
Yeah right!! Take those rose-colored lenses off your eyes
No sleep, no friends, just me and my unflattering silhouette
My only physical activity-“Throw the diaper in the bin” game


More years go by, and mid-life crisis is the name of the game
What is really the “mid” when you wish for eternity?
Damn my neighbors, on their driveway I see a Porsche’s silhouette
surely the creeps must’ve recently inherited a fortune, hmm, I wish…
But oh well, at least now the mad-for-nothing wife talks only with her eyes
Thank you, I can now enjoy my 15 years single malt in silence! Ah, pleasure!


Music is divine, music is enriching, music is pleasure
I tell my kids while driving them to their soccer game
Classic rock on the radio, I rock, and they roll…their eyes
I get my laughs and revenge watching their team lose to “Alien Eternity”
We ride back home after fulfilling their ice cream wish
Wife’s tuned to her favorite show: 21 Forever-Skin, hair & silhouette


...to be continued!

Huffing and puffing, I paused here about a month ago. I guess I’ma wait here and rest a li’l bit before I wrap this up. The tortoise ain’t nowhere in sight…maybe I’ll take a nap!

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12 Comments:

Anonymous Anonymous said...

We likes! Love how the mood flits between lines.

Finish up quick, boy. Ye know I lack patience!

8:53 AM, October 02, 2006  
Blogger M3 said...

Thanks! Will finish it this weekend. Works?

How was Dussehra?

7:25 PM, October 02, 2006  
Blogger longblackveil said...

Aiya-yayya-yayya-yai... The amount od research I had to do just to write a polite reply thaniing thee for dropping in on my blog. Sestina-schmestina!
Very nice, saar.
Yes, Susmit Sen is something else.

7:59 PM, October 02, 2006  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Dussehra was uneventful. But I had a nice break thanks to the long weekend. Thanks for asking.

How was yours?

6:07 AM, October 04, 2006  
Blogger Sin said...

I hope this was solely for the sestina's sake! :P

Brilliant as usual! Your poetry never stops amazing me! :)

12:09 PM, October 09, 2006  
Blogger second_wind said...

waiting to see this continues??

7:41 PM, October 11, 2006  
Blogger M3 said...

@longblackveil: Thanks!

@driftwood: Dussehra was good! My mom's visiting me, so you can imagine these firangs wondering why we were running over lemons in the parking lot on Ayudha puja day :-)

@TF: Gawd pramisss! Jusht for Sestina, you know :-)

@SW: :-) Will surely continue...juggling a lot of things right now. How's you?

6:17 PM, October 17, 2006  
Blogger simplemissie said...

Happy diwali to Mr and Mrs S.

7:20 AM, October 19, 2006  
Blogger chérie said...

WOAH, you are the only person I know who can pull off something like this!

What happens next???

12:32 PM, November 08, 2006  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Brilliant. First time here. Used to go by 'venus' before. brilliant stuff.

11:02 AM, November 18, 2006  
Blogger M3 said...

@sm: Hey!! Long time!How's you?
@cher: :-) Will let you know!
@eris: Thank you! You are very kind!

6:05 PM, November 21, 2006  
Anonymous Souji said...

Hi, couldnt get the meaning of ur poetry, the language is far away from what i know....

...but want to tell u that , the tortoise had crossed u long back,enough of taking a nap now Plz wake up n continue....

3:32 AM, April 27, 2010  

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